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CHARACTER PROFILE: Sophia Angelinus Wittnaeur


Jan 30 2005, 10:51 PM (Post #1)
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Full Character Name: Sophia Angelinus(it's pronounce An-gel-ih-nus) Wittnauer
Character Nickname: N/A
Age / Date of Birth: approximately 19 / Unknown
Class / Job: Mercenary / None
Gender: Female
Relatives: Deceased/Unknown
Height / Weight: 5'7”/135lbs

Other Physical Attributes / Appearances: At first glance, guessing she is a mercenary, or anything regarded as that dark would be impossible. Only average height, and lightweight, she appears to be quite a pushover. However, with nearly all of her weight being in leg muscle and upper body strength, she is hardly weak, and that is noticeable, as her body, despite being small, is quite toned. Her appearance is that of a goddess: her ices a reflective light, icy blue shade, her skin a golden tan, and her hair a silk-like golden blonde, and is close to shoulder-length. However, to avoid her hair getting in her way during fights, or by revealing her female gender, she generally wears it in a ponytail, which slides down the back of her head into the back of the shimmering silver armor that she constantly wears. She has a long vertical scar on her right arm, extending from about an inch beneath her shoulder to her elbow.

Mental Attributes / Personality: Although young, and still inexperienced of many of the ways of the world, Sophia has long since outgrown her naďve state. She tries to avoid unfair and hasty judgments, strives to stay positive, and tries to remain calm, and she shows this off. However, on the inside, she is emotionally scarred and confused. While quite social and outgoing, she has a hard time “making friends” and is reluctant to trust those she is not familiar with.

Background / History: Sophia was born in the outskirts of Orinal to a poor family. However, her mother died giving birth to her, and was left with just her father. When she was six or seven, her father was ill stricken. Although Sophia did her best to take care of him, he never fully recovered. Shortly after, near her next birthday, her and her father were walking through the forest when a group of thieves cornered them. After her father refused to hand over their belongings, the thieves attacked them, leaving her father severely wounded. He died within minutes, bleeding to death in the hands of his daughter.

Following the death of her father, Sophia moved out of Orinal and lived by herself. She trained herself to fight, both in unarmed combat and with blades. Before she had even turned fourteen, she felt she had completed her training. Quite confident in her abilities, she set out to track down the killers of her family. After nearly two years of searching, she had a lead on a group of notorious thieves in the Orinal area. Eventually, she found the thieves, tracking them down in lowlife bar filled with similar scum. She instigated a fight with the group of thieves, surprising them. She was easily able to slit the throat of the leader, who personally had dealt the critical blow to her father. She also slayed his “right hand man”, and attempted to kill the remaining thief, who put up a fight. The thief successfully struck her down, and was going to finish her off, but she put her right arm up in front of her face. Instead of killing her, the thief’s sword slashed through the flesh on her arm, leaving a deep gash. Although injured severely, she was able to recover, and finally killed the remaining thief, although she had a permanent memento upon her.
Following her avenging of her father’s death, she expected her pain to go away; however, rather than being destroyed, it multiplied. Killing them didn’t bring her father back: it only added to the casualty list, making her feel worse. However, she knew that during her fight, she did feel better. She felt better from the pain, and the violence. As a result, she felt she would kill those who did wrong. And that’s what it started out as: she merely protected those that were too weak to fight. However, the anger consumed her, and she was soon killing whoever she had to kill to make money. She had entered the dark world of violence and crime that she once had a deep hatred for. She had become a mercenary.

Equipment / Clothing: Perhaps the most noticeable thing worn by Sophia is the large piece of shimmering silver armor that covers her chest and extends slightly onto her arms. It looks quite worn, and countless gashes across it, that stand out because of dry blood that have seeped their way into the cuts. Underneath the metal is a small black T-shirt that extends down the arms slightly past the metal, but still reveals the massive scar on her upper arm. On her legs she wears simple, dark black jeans. On her feet are moderately tarnished black combat boots that, although scratched and scuffed, still seem to exalt a high level of pride and honor. There is a small black strap around her left thigh that holds a small silver dagger.

Other Information: TBD

This post has been edited by 118513: Jan 30 2005, 10:53 PM
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Jan 30 2005, 11:34 PM (Post #2)
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It'd help if you quote the scores too, lol... but I'm sure you pass, with at least a 90%, cuz there's a slight problem with your grammar and usage
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Jan 31 2005, 04:16 AM (Post #3)
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If there else, you can blame Microsoft Word because I looked at it several times, and ran the spelling/grammar checker, as well.

And here are the point total things. I suggest that you tell people to put those in the application. Otherwise, newbs like me will never know.

General Criterias:
Topic Title: Character Profile: Character Name (5 Points)
Topic Description: Whatever you feel fits (0 Points)
Length: (10+ points - Extras will count as "Extra Credit")
Grammar / Spelling: (6+ points - Exceptional work will receive "Extra Credit")
Neatness / Creativity: (6+ points - Same as above)

Profile Content:
Full Character Name (s): (4 Points)
Character Nickname (s): (3 Points)
Age / Date of Birth [If Known]: (4 Points)
Class / Job: (4 Points)
Gender: (2 Points)
Relatives: (4 Points)
Height / Weight: (2 Points)
Other Physical Attributes / Appearances: (10 Points)
Mental Attributes / Personality: (10 Points)
Background / History: (12 Points)
Equipment / Clothing: (10 Points)
Other Information: (8 Points)

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Jan 31 2005, 04:19 AM (Post #4)
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Lets hope you actually get yours
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Jan 31 2005, 05:01 AM (Post #5)
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91%

You missed one on the grammar, and missed the whole thing on Other Information. But that's pretty good... You pass. Unless haven gives you any worse, you get the license, and he usually grades more leniantly than I do.

Congrats!
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Jan 31 2005, 08:46 PM (Post #6)
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Topic Title: 5/5 Points
Length: 10/10 Points
Grammar / Spelling: 5/6 Points
Neatness / Creativity: 6/6 Points

Profile Content:
Full Character Name: 4/4 Points
Character Nickname: 3/3 Points
Age / Date of Birth: 4/4 Points
Class / Job: 4/4 Points
Gender: 2/2 Points
Relatives: 4/4 Points
Height / Weight: 2/2 Points
Other Physical Attributes / Appearances: 10/10 Points
Mental Attributes / Personality: 10/10 Points
Background / History: 12/12 Points
Equipment / Clothing: 10/10 Points
Other Information: 0/8 Points

My Grade: 91/100
-I found exactly the same things Grand did....the grammar was fine until the Equipment / Clothing section, which isn't far enough off for Word to catch it. And with the missing Other Information category, that's all for your deductions.

Congrats, you passed! XD If it weren't for that missing category, you would've come very close to a perfect score.
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Jan 31 2005, 10:36 PM (Post #7)
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Well, I was thinking about adding it, but I wasn't sure what would be classified as other information. After all, I thought that anything that needed explaining or detailing had already been mentioned in the rest of the profile.

I blame Haven for not giving me a proper explanation of what I was supposed to put there. -_-; Dammit, and I would have been almost perfect, as well. And I agree with the equipment thing, I was rushed and confused(I had all her clothing in the appearance section, so I was gonna copy/paste it...except I copied over it before I could paste it and it was late so I hurried and rushed and screwed it up FROWN.GIF )

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Jan 31 2005, 11:24 PM (Post #8)
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It's OK. You passed.

Now, have you gotten the license?
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Feb 3 2005, 09:06 PM (Post #9)
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Congratulations. stongue.gif Thanks to Haven, It's another bio I won't have to grade.
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Feb 6 2005, 09:02 PM (Post #10)
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QUOTE (GRAND @ Jan 31 2005, 06:23 PM)
Now, have you gotten the license?
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I don't know. I thought all I had to do to get the license was make a character bio and have it graded as passing. Is there more to it that I overlooked? :blink:
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Feb 6 2005, 11:20 PM (Post #11)
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I mean, did you get the license sent to ya?
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Feb 15 2005, 02:15 AM (Post #12)
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No, I didn't get anything sent to me. What was supposed to be sent to me?
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Feb 15 2005, 02:58 AM (Post #13)
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Err, yes... I'll send one to you then.
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