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Character Profile: Mel Paladino


Mar 30 2005, 10:37 AM (Post #1)
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Full Character Name (s): Mel Paladino
Character Nickname (s): Mel, PD
Age / Date of Birth: 19/1-15-1986
Relatives: Both her parents are still alive. She has a twin sisterand older brother, a spinster aunt, another aunt and an uncle, and four cousins.
Class / Job: Dragoon/none yet
Gender: female
Height / Weight: 5'1"/115 lbs.
Other Physical Attributes / Appearance: She is a Dragonian, with smooth, glassy, pale indigo scales, silver talons, and golden-amber eyes. Her underside and wing membranes are lavender. She has two scars on her muzzle, an X-shaped scar through her left eye and three scratch scars under that, and a lightning bolt-like scar arching across her chest.
Mental Attributes / Personality: Mel has something of a dual personality, with her "lighter" side being optimistic, incredibly annoying, hyperactive (so it seems), and empathic. She may revert to her "darker" side when she is not feeling well—she turns cynical and listless, not to mention annoyingly apathetic. However, she can keep her temper under control, and if caught in a tight spot, will process all options before picking what seems to be the best way out. She can be philosophical, twisting words to fit her reasons, and will negotiate if she can do nothing. But if she sees no way of escape, or thinks it is too risky, she will stay quiet, assessing the situation all the while.
Background / History: Born in the city of Malismur, Mel grew up in an ever-changing environment...Her family moved around a lot, from slums to apartments to haunted houses. Along the way, she became an avid reader of books on biology, fantasy, and the paranormal, and she also took up music. When her family settled down in Ruthenia, she took up self-defense, magic and weaponry. She didn't display any exceptional talent, but she learned enough so that she could protect herself when she was in trouble. Nowadays she travels the world over, looking for odd jobs just for the heck of it—her family is well-off—and hoping to learn more...
Equipment: She wears a long-sleeved, white linen shirt, blue silk pants, and a yellow silk sash as a belt. Over her shirt, she has on a platinum breastplate edged in gold and with gold designs and an emerald, a helmet of the same materials and with 3 emeralds, and thick gold cuffs around her wrists and above her elbows. (The ones above her elbows are worn outside the shirt.) Attached to the cuffs, running from the wrist to the elbow, are bolts of red cloth. Around her tail are three gold rings and a small, scythe-shaped spike, also made of platinum, edged in gold, and bearing an emerald. For a weapon, she has a Lightning Sword.
Other Information: (I've done a drawing of her, and I'll edit it as soon as I can scan it in.)
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Mar 30 2005, 06:12 PM (Post #2)
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I can tell you are basing much of these on your self stongue.gif Or actually, your perception of yourself... (Like the name Mel, which is derived from your name)

And how you think you're always hyper stongue.gif

But the height-weight proportion seems a little... ehh... out of place... But then again, she's a dragonian... ok, nevermind.

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Topic Title: Character Profile: Character Name (5 / 5 Points)
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Length: (10 / 10+ points - Extras will count as "Extra Credit")
Grammar / Spelling: (6 / 6+ points - Exceptional work will receive "Extra Credit")
Neatness / Creativity: (6 / 6+ points - Same as above)

Profile Content:
Full Character Name (s): (4 / 4 Points)
Character Nickname (s): (3 / 3 Points)
Age / Date of Birth [If Known]: (4 / 4 Points)
Class / Job: (4 / 4 Points)
Gender: (2 / 2 Points)
Relatives: (4 / 4 Points)
Height / Weight: (2 / 2 Points)
Other Physical Attributes / Appearances: (10 / 10 Points)
Mental Attributes / Personality: (~9 / 10 Points - Some parts sounded as if they were worded wrong bigeyes.gif Ok, sounded awkward.)
Background / History: (12 / 12 Points - I don't think I should take points off, but is it her family, as in her parents, or HER family, as in her kids and stuff? *looks at age* Err, nevermind)
Equipment / Clothing: (10 / 10 Points)
Other Information: (0 / 0 Points) - Omitted. I'll add it in once you do the drawing... Or scan it...

so ta dum...

Sum Total: 91 / 92!!!

Great!
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Mar 31 2005, 11:57 AM (Post #3)
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Thanks...I was going to make her heavier, but then again, she probably wouldn't be able to fly... bigeyes.gif So, yeah... XD
Thanks. Guess this means I have a license now... ^_^ Won't start RPing yet, though...I'll sit back and watch for a while...
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Mar 31 2005, 06:58 PM (Post #4)
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I think either wolf or Haven has to grade you too...

Since you passed with a really high score, assuming you will draw it up in the future *cough*, and if neither Haven nor Wolf comes back to grade it within a week, I'll give you the license. (Read over this sentence carefully - complex and long sentences are confusing)
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Apr 1 2005, 12:28 AM (Post #5)
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I understand. The drawing is still required, and I have to wait for Wolf or Haven. But if they don't come within a week, I'll have my license. ^_^
The drawing might take a while...It's also the one I'm planning to show to Haven for the manga.

This post has been edited by PaladinDragoon: Apr 1 2005, 12:28 AM
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Apr 1 2005, 12:33 AM (Post #6)
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Then put something else in the place of "Other Information"...

I doubt Wolf will come, although Haven's getting close to break time.
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Apr 5 2005, 03:16 AM (Post #7)
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Topic Title: 5/5 Points
Length: 8/10 Points
Grammar / Spelling: 6/6 points
Neatness / Creativity: 7/6 points

Profile Content:
Full Character Name: 4/4 Points
Character Nickname: 3/3 Points
Age / Date of Birth: 4/4 Points
Class / Job: 4/4 Points
Gender: 2/2 Points
Relatives: 4/4 Points
Height / Weight: 2/2 Points
Other Physical Attributes / Appearances: 10/10 Points
Mental Attributes / Personality: 10/10 Points
Background / History: 11/12 Points
Equipment / Clothing: 10/10 Points
Other Information: 0/0 (0/8) Points

My Grade (w/ OI) - 90/100
My Grade (w/o OI) - 98/100
-Either way its good enough to get a license. The only problem I have with it is its length. It's a bit too short for standard, and it doesn't quite go into the detail I prefer. Otherwise, I like the unique direction in which you've taken the character. You're the first member to make a main-character bio with a dragoon background.
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Apr 5 2005, 04:07 AM (Post #8)
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I think the length is fine. She does a lot of histories anyways
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Apr 5 2005, 08:33 AM (Post #9)
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QUOTE
It's a bit too short for standard, and it doesn't quite go into the detail I prefer.

Lol, what detail would you prefer, then? lol.gif
Thanks for grading...All I'm waiting for now is Wolf's grade...He hasn't replied to my PM about this yet... ermm.gif
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Apr 5 2005, 11:33 PM (Post #10)
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You only need two to grade sbiggrin.gif

Congrats, you pass. An RP License sent! Enjoy!
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Apr 6 2005, 01:27 AM (Post #11)
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I thought the Bold-Underlined-Italicized 'I' would get the point across that it is just MY opinion, sbiggrin.gif. Remember, I'm only one of three people on here with the capacity to give you a license.
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Apr 6 2005, 01:55 AM (Post #12)
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And even if Haven doesn't, there's still one more
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Apr 6 2005, 04:14 PM (Post #13)
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Regardless, I'm putting my two cents in. I'm going to give you a 90/10...length wasn't that great, but you could get a 100 with that picture. Wonderful bio, but she's awfully young to be dragoon.
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Apr 7 2005, 01:28 AM (Post #14)
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Erm, OK, but I didn't exactly have anything to work with... XD
Thanks, anyway, Wolf! ^_^
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Apr 7 2005, 01:44 AM (Post #15)
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You got your License, so this topic will be ... left open for further CONTRIBUTING comments.
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