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Character Profile: Neréllin Fironze Descia


Dec 17 2005, 11:10 PM (Post #1)
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Full Character Name (s):
Neréllin Fironze Descia

Character Nickname (s):
Neré, pronounced Near-reh. Uncommon to call him such. Usually, Descia is what he goes by and those around him assume it to be his first name, and those who know his first name, assume ‘Descia’ to be a nickname.

Age / Date of Birth [If Known]:
19 / Winter Solstice, the 9th of Nerierre (similar to the month of December) of the 719th Turn under rule of the god of silence, Vullien (like the zodiac, which god one is born under dictates their fate, so the legend goes)

Class / Job:
Elemental / Thirteenth Member of Elementals’ Circle

Gender:
Male

Relatives:
- Sire, Lord Filkan.
- Older brother, Nosaea.
- Twin sister, Legraci.

Height / Weight:
Five feet seven / One hundred thirty two pounds.

Other Physical Qualities / Appearances:
At nineteen and five feet seven, Descia is markedly slim, bordering on an unpleasantly thin figure, and chooses to hide this beneath layer upon layer of clothing. True to his bloodline, Descia has black hair, light, silver-white eyes, almost seemingly bloodless lips, and a pale, nearly white, complexion.

He was born physically fragile (in regards to his bones), and with the inability to stop bleeding once he starts to. Added to this, he easily tires from meager activities such as walking, or just simply sitting up for a very long time. Only a single, faint scar under his right eye mars his skin, a testament to his avoidance of physical labors.

Mental Qualities / Personality:
Because he is a Trueborn, the god who rules his birth has, supposedly, complete control over him. Descia grew up in silence, barely speaking a word of anything to anyone or anything. He dislikes being a Trueborn, and despite feeling comfortable in silence and loneliness, he is disagreeable with the notion that his free will should be restricted. To him, he is the one who chooses silence over all else, and will scorn those who assume otherwise.

Descia is a sardonic character, with a dry sense of humour, and indifference for those around him. His interest lies not with the outside world and people, but within his own mind and books and magic.

Background / History:
During the war between those trying to eradicate magic from existence and those who view magic as much a part of existence as life is, the center of magic, the Kingdom of Ellyas, became a poisonous trap for those who once flourished in its connection to all of the elements.

Ellyas, the beautiful kingdom that had once attracted so many, now rejected all who had even the remotest of ties to magic of any kind. In fear, those who still lived fled the kingdom, and the Ellyan Wall barricaded them from ever returning. But the curse of Ellyas clung to them, clung to the very fabric of Time and tore at their magic, making even the simplest of spells equal disaster.

Because magic was so much a part of them, the survivors slowly died as the magic deteriorated and left emptiness in its place within their souls. In the end, the dead could not even rest for their spirit had been shredded beyond recognition with the amount of emptiness that was left behind. ((Magic resides within the soul, instead of blood. In theory, if a person survives losing their magic, the pieces of their souls should breach the gap in between them, and stitch itself back together.))

In an attempt to save as many survivors as possible, four of the remaining elves, twenty eight of human mages, nineteen of alchemists, and the last eleven of the elementals brought up a Soul Shield that went beyond physical safety and into the depths of the core of each and every soul of the survivors, reinforcing the bond between magic and soul, as well as locking it in place and shielding it.

Because the shield was crafted within an environment imbued deeply with the curse, almost half of the casters died, and a few of the survivors with the shield inside of them weakened considerably. The shield would not last long, so, as a last resort, all of them joined the shields of each and every person together … and, using their own magic as well as raw magic from the universe, they tore open the Realm and created a new one, Miy’alvies ((in Elvish, meaning “elsewhere”), completely from magic.

In the end, they had to use the magic Universe’s own energies to close Miy’alvies off from their former world. In their desperation and ignorance, they had not known that by drawing from the energies of the Universe, they were, essentially, also drawing the energies from the deities. As a consequence, the survivors became indebted, as well as connected intricately, to the fifteen deities of their former world.

Even in Miy’alvies, the curse still plagued them. The most complicated and the most simple of spells took more concentration and help from a person’s patron deity that ever before, and even then, the risk of disaster was high. Those casters of the shield who survived made a pact of with the deities, using the connection between them and their gods and goddesses to their advantage.

Every once and a while, a child would be born under the rule of a deity. Unlike all others, the child possesses a shield-free soul, and stabilized magic, that would, in turn, stabilize the energies of Miy’alvies, but the price was a harsh blow. The child’s soul belongs to the deity s/he was born under.

Completely.

These children were called Trueborn, for they held the power to return all of Miy’alvies back to its true magical state.

The eleven elementals became the protector of the Trueborns, and formed the Elemental Council. For each elemental that dies, a new one is born and is immediately integrated into the Council by the magic of Miy’alvies and the will of the deities.

Descia the fifth in seven centuries to be both Trueborn and a member of the Council. It was a fluke, in actuality, for he was supposed to be only a Trueborn’s protector, but an unexpected death of the Trueborn born at the same time as him, transferred the Trueborn’s pact with Vullien to him, instead. Vullien, pitying Descia’s plight, released any true hold he had to Descia’s soul, and now, Descia is ONLY a Council member in all but name.

Those unaware still see him as a Trueborn, and without a Trueborn to protect, he cannot completely prove his status as only another Elemental of the Council.

Equipment / Clothing:
Descia wears loose robes with many folds to hide his skinny body, and, because of his weak body, he does not carry any weapons with him. He dabbles in alchemy and has many trinkets that he has created himself and collected over the years - and literally, his equipment for alchemic studies.

Other Information:
- Descia is an outcast in Miy’alvies because of his status as both Trueborn and Elemental. Even if he wasn’t so weak as to stay in bed or one of his many rooms all the time, those of Miy’alvies would have steered clear of his presence, for the prospect of having stable elemental magic as well as having a deity so tied to one’s fate makes them uneasy. They see him as someone who is unlikely to hesitate in abusing those qualities.

- Descia’s twin, Legraci, is the only one who bothers to talk to him. On a regular basis, she spends time with him and is probably the only friend he has. And the only one who has seen him smile.

- Once, Vullien had, in sympathy, offered to make Descia a normal person, magically. In reply, Descia had laughed and had spat at the offer, making it blatant what he thought of it. To only change him magically (making it weaker and less stable) would leave him as useless as a cripple. He was not going to let go of the only thing he had to hold against those who’ve looked at him with mistrust and fear. And should he become a cripple, the looks would change to sympathy and pity. But everyone would still not care for him.

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The 3/4s of the credit for the history of the world that Descia belongs to goes to Risseiya. Everything else is of my own creation.
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Dec 18 2005, 02:10 AM (Post #2)
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He had permission to use and exploit the history, too. >_< And it's his, also, so he didn't need the permission, anyways. <_<
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Dec 18 2005, 03:59 AM (Post #3)
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Holistic Grades:
Length: (11/10+ points)
English Syntax: (5/5+ points)
Creativity: (6/5+ points)
Total / Final Grade: (102/100+ points)

Profile Content:
Full Character Name (s): (3/3 Points)
Character Nickname (s): (2/2 Points)
Age / Date of Birth [If Known]: (3/3 Points)
Class / Job: (3/3 Points)
Gender: (2/2 Points)
Relatives: (5/5 Points)
Height / Weight: (2/2 Points)
Other Physical Qualities / Appearances: (15/15 Points)
Mental Qualities / Personality: (15/15 Points)
Background / History: (20/20 Points)
Equipment / Clothing: (8/10 Points - could've been more specific)
Other Information: (+2 - Not Required, but recommended)

*rubs eyes* Holy ... 102% I was having trouble trying to figure out where to deduct points stongue.gif
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Dec 18 2005, 05:18 AM (Post #4)
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Holistic Grades:
Length: 11/10 points
English Syntax: 4/5 points
Creativity: 5/5 points

Profile Content:
Full Character Name (s): 3/3 Points
Character Nickname (s): 2/2 Points
Age / Date of Birth [If Known]: 3/3 Points
Class / Job: 3/3 Points
Gender: 2/2 Points
Relatives: 5/5 Points
Height / Weight: 2/2 Points
Other Physical Qualities / Appearances: 15/15 Points
Mental Qualities / Personality: 15/15 Points
Background / History: 19/20 Points
Equipment / Clothing: 9/10 Points
Other Information: +1/0

Total / Final Grade: 99/100 points
-Not quite as perfect as Grand said, but still damn good. o_o
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Dec 18 2005, 05:43 AM (Post #5)
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The history seemed as complete as it could be. Where did you take points off from?

And syntax I didn't find major mistakes in...

I would give >100% though
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Dec 18 2005, 02:51 PM (Post #6)
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*squeals and hugs Fay* YES!! YOU PASSED!!!

*hugs Grand and Odd (for this special occasion, I'll call you by your name <_<), too*

^_^

The history was rather sketchy. It's nearly four pages long (bigeyes.gif)-->blink.gif) typed up in Microsoft Word, and I think Fay thought that it'd be too long if he just copied and pasted all four pages. The casters of the soul shield had names, personalities, and everything. And the reason the war started wasn't mentioned either.

But since Nerellin is a post-first-war character, the history of the world Descia's in would be too long.

There's actually four parts:

- First War
- Post First War
- Second War
- Post Second War

And if you count the history of the nonmagical peoples, of the other magical creatures, of the gods, that's nearly fourteen-twenty+ pages long.

... we had a lot of free time <_< ... And it was a project / dare to develop a completely new world, independent of this world and all other fantasy worlds. We had to make it complex, different, and overall, realistic. Magic even had a THEORY for it, for gods sake. And a crazy, obsessive blonde scientist who discovered it. >_<

There's already some RPs going on right now, and with the KoT challenge taking up some of our time, we're holding up on posting this RP idea. If we did, it'd be called Shadow of the Moon. And it'd be Post-second war. Because that's newest and shortest of them all.

This post has been edited by risseiya: Dec 18 2005, 02:59 PM
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Dec 18 2005, 06:45 PM (Post #7)
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One point off syntax for the relatives (I still like it to be complete sentences), plus two mistakes in the big-ass history. o_o

In the history....I forgot, lol.
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Dec 18 2005, 06:51 PM (Post #8)
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Editing four-twenty+ something pages of history into a very brief, but sufficient page long something is quite hard. Perhaps you should try it sometime?

I am joking, honest. I have never been all that good with condensing anything, I am reluctant to admit, but a 99% is not all that bad, is it?

Thank you, both you and Grand, for the grades.

... And, yes, the history is rather long. You should consider yourself lucky you are not subjected to the full thing.
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Dec 18 2005, 07:29 PM (Post #9)
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XD, I understand....and I wouldn't have minded reading the whole thing anymore than what you posted. I've written just as much history for my book, sbiggrin.gif.
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Dec 18 2005, 07:33 PM (Post #10)
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QUOTE (Odd @ Dec 18 2005, 02:29 PM)
XD, I understand....and I wouldn't have minded reading the whole thing anymore than what you posted. I've written just as much history for my book, sbiggrin.gif.
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So you write. Interesting. Are you planning, by any chance, to get published? Somewhat off topic, this. Do you suppose if a topic on "Aspiring Writers Who Want To Get Published" was started, it would be any popular?

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Horribly long title for a topic. I told you I am bad at condensing.
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Dec 18 2005, 07:59 PM (Post #11)
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As long as this is your topic, it doesn't matter how off-topic we get..besides, we're still talking about writing, lol.

Yes though, I am going to try to get published. I have also been trying to win some free poetry contests for about a week now, XD. Not long, I know, but I wanted to gather an impressive archive of them before I tried to go public. If I win just one of the three contests I entered, I'll get a tax-free $10,000. sbiggrin.gif
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Dec 18 2005, 08:03 PM (Post #12)
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I wish you luck. 10,000 is quite a load. I think, perhaps, that is 1/3 of Harvard fees. But I might be mistaken.

Should you win, what do you plan to do with your prize?
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Dec 18 2005, 08:25 PM (Post #13)
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o_o, use it to fund my year off before college and possibly help in the creation of the Origin RPG Game...during that year off I'll be doing everything in my power to get published and earn even more money. o_o
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Dec 18 2005, 08:31 PM (Post #14)
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Yeah...I'm trying to get some of my own published, but I'm not as focused on it as Odd is. But yeah...reading over your profile, it looks nice- but I'll be the first to admit I didn't actually read your history XD
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Dec 18 2005, 10:20 PM (Post #15)
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o_o, what're you going to try to do after school wolf? My future IS writing, so I don't have much of a choice, XD.

Also...*smack*, the history is cool, and it really doesn't take that long to read it, lol.
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