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Dec 8 2004, 04:57 AM (Post #1)
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DONE!!

Full Character Name: Momori Zaushi

Character Nicknames: LB, Lightning Flash, Speed Demon

Date of Birth: July 1st, 1987

Class /Job: Bodyguard/Assassin

Gender: Male

Relatives: (not revealed to protect them) Father - x Mother - x Sister - x Sister -x Brother - x

Height: 6'1"

Weight:
131 lbs

Appearance: Brown eyes, black hair, and has extremely well developed leg and arm muscles. He wears pants and a half hand shirt. He has an extremely large and heavy blade on his back (about 9 feet long, 2 feet wide, 7 inches thick, and about 120 lbs) which he can swing around with ease. His face has one scar by the side. His fists are bruised and scarred all over and his calf's and knees are full of cuts.

Background: Zaushi was born to a successful family of traders in a small village. As a young kid he used to travel with his parents when they went to sell goods at the big cities and villages. One day in a city he came across a combat school. The building intruded him so he sneaked into it and what he saw would effect him forever. There were many kids and adults there training and fighting, learning how to become a high rank warrior. From that moment he made up his mind to become the greatest warrior that ever lived. That was his dream and he would work at it forever. He knew, however, that he would never be accepted into combat school but didn't give up. He didn't have any exceptional physical skills and his control over magic was below average. But he worked his ass off everyday and began to increase in strength and speed.

Finally at the age of 11 he was recognized by others in his village and urged to go to the village to become a warrior. His parents gave him some money and told him to go if he wanted. Soon after he left for the city and joined the combat school there. However he was still one of the weakest people there since he still had poor control over magic. After seeing how good the other fighters were, he doubled his training and worker harder than anyone there. Everyday he would get up and just try and improve. Eventually at the age of 13 he was recommended as a skilled rookie and that he should be moved up to a low class warrior. However he was denied the promotion since his control over magic was too poor.

Zaushi was clearly stronger than any other rookie but he would not be allowed to become an official low class warrior till he could improve his magic skills. He worked hard and tried everyday but he could only improve them a bit. At the age of 14 he tried again to become a low class warrior but was failed again. He tried hard everyday and eventually at the age of 15 became a low class warrior. However he received a letter the next day after his promotion that if he didn't improve his control over magic in the next month he would be kicked out of combat school. He practiced everyday but couldn't do it in one month and was kicked out.

He then wandered around and 2 weeks later he met Grand (=/). Grand said he could make him the greatest warrior ever and he eagerly joined Grand. At the age of 16 his skills improved even more and he became the right hand of Grand and was ranked as an Elite warrior. He still pursues his dream to become the greatest warrior that ever lived and would do anything for that dream. Since he joined Grand, he has attacked many enemies but has never brought himself to killing one enemy. He is the ultimate warrior, he never loses in speed or strength. Even though his control over magic is still extremely weak, his physical skills are unbeatable. He easily dodges every physical and magic attack thrown at him with his speed and can appear right behind enemies in an instant. He wields a blade that is 120 lbs, 9 ft long, 2 ft wide, and 7 inches thick with ease. He has perfected many fighting styles and has never been beaten by anyone in a fight.

Personality: Zaushi is very naieve and his dream to be the best often makes him act the way he does. He trusts everyone even if everyone else around him doesn't. He is always positive and never thinks negative. He values life and how great it is instead of regretting the actions he makes. Because of this he can never bring him to kill someone but still injures some pretty badly (but not too much). He can also easily be tricked since he is so trusting. Basically he is like a little kid and doesn't really think too much about what will happen but does it just for his dream.

Equipment / Clothing
: He wears pants and a half hand shirt most of the time (unless its freezing). He carries a huge blade which hangs across his back and 2 short daggers on his left leg. His shoes are made so they are extremely light and can endure the speed he moves at without taking too much damage by pushing more force through the ground.

Other Info: Uhhh if you have a sad story or tell him that you want to be the best then he will help you out even if you are his enemy.

This post has been edited by Legendary Bladesman: Mar 29 2005, 06:14 AM
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Mar 16 2005, 01:48 AM (Post #16)
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QUOTE (Wolfwood @ Mar 14 2005, 06:14 PM)
Which is my point exactly. I just find it pure bulls*it that your character can lift a blade that heavy without using any type of magic/techniques. The way I see it, this bio will never be graded a passing score unless something is backing that up.
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lmao wow if magic is okay then this is okay. Magic and s*it is bs except its popular bs because its in many games. Well if magic or techinques that aren't even possible are okay then this is okay too. If you want to say no to this then you have to say no to everything involving magic out there. If you say that someone cant weild such a huge blade I can say the same thing and say someone cant use magic or techniques. GG noob.

QUOTE (GRAND @ Mar 15 2005, 03:43 PM)
Increasing his strength won't do much, considering it would cause him to be unbalanced so bad, with his low weight, that he'll just fall.

Think about it, any object with any momentum produces outward forces... It's called the centrifugal force
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lol none of these bios are based on anything scientific or facutal (all of I've read so far). If you do want to make it realistic I suggest that you have every other bio changed and then I will change mine.
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Mar 16 2005, 01:50 AM (Post #17)
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Nowhere have I stated you were disqualified because of it. I am only pointing out the factual stuff.

Only thing that needs to be done is the format
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Mar 16 2005, 01:52 AM (Post #18)
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K I'll get to that later but we dont care about facts. It is an rpg forum, a place to mix creativity, imagination, and some realism.
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Mar 16 2005, 05:26 AM (Post #19)
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There still are limits to fantasy stongue.gif Like you can't just magically kill someone, just like that.
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Mar 16 2005, 07:05 AM (Post #20)
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You misunderstand me here. Using telekinetics as a force to control the blade? No, you would not be unbalanced there because of using the force of telekinetics. It would be a weird feeling, being that your moving your arms different than usual and that you have to keep up your leg movement. Also, telekinetics (Like all magic) has an MP Limit. You can't use telekinetics for hours on end unless your a Telekinetic Sage or something, in which case your character is not. Also, you need something to back the fact that you can carry a 110-pound sword. Unless you can do that, you are frankly god-modding.
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Mar 17 2005, 12:07 AM (Post #21)
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Give some explanation as to why... Say your grandpa was a tele. master, and taught you how to handle it or something like that
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Mar 17 2005, 11:43 PM (Post #22)
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Yeah, but remember everything has a limit.
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Mar 18 2005, 07:07 AM (Post #23)
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lol noobs. Ever hear of hard work, well maybe he worked hard since he was a kid and is now a kickass warrior. DUH, everything is inherited (plus hard work owns everything else). Also wolf if you say that the mp is the limit then my character also can use his as long as he has enough life (since if you get injured you get weaker). Okay I guess everything is in order now. gg
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Mar 19 2005, 12:10 AM (Post #24)
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<_< So you're saying if I make a profile I can say because of hard work, I can magically kill people before they even notice it?
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Mar 19 2005, 01:11 AM (Post #25)
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If you have a valid reason. For example, if you studied a technique that could kill people instantly (Making their head explode for example), you could use to kill NPC's...But if you want to kill somebodies character, you need to consult the other player. Wounding however is a different story. But if your character is resistant to fire, you can void a post if your opponent is using fire to attack you (Or play along and act as if it didn't hurt you), but again...Everything does have a limit to which it can be used. Telekinetics doesn't cost HP, and wielding a blade doesn't sap HP neither. LB, if you say your character was a hard worker- make it into a sub-story in your history. The way you have it now and the way I think your explaining it, nobody will ever pass this profile.
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Mar 19 2005, 03:35 AM (Post #26)
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My character's just extremely fast like that sbiggrin.gif He can see before light even reaches his eyes stongue.gif
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Mar 19 2005, 03:48 AM (Post #27)
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Uh all of you are idiots. Hard work can do anything. Also wolf if you say weilding a blade doesn't sap health then you are a bigger idiot than I already though you were. If youdo any physical activity you feel weaker but of course people like you who sit home all day watching TV never know the benefits of hard work of how straining an activity can be. So next time you try to put some of my stuff down, uhh go get some valid reasons. Also who cares if you pass it or not, you just cant accept my character because he's new and all you're used to is your video games with magic. Go outside and try some sports for a change.

Oh and just to let you guys know, I broke absolutely no rules in this post (I just read them all after I finished this post).
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Mar 19 2005, 04:44 AM (Post #28)
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Just do the format right and extend on that, in the history. Then I'll pass ya. That's all I ask!

(The format thing should be simple)
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Mar 19 2005, 05:50 AM (Post #29)
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I'm not even like half done =/ I did this a long time ago and forgot to finish it till Wolf bumped it. I'll finish it this weekend though, hopefully...
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Mar 19 2005, 06:43 PM (Post #30)
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It saps your stamina. Health counts towards something like cuts and scrapes- stamia is your physical energy. And Grand, I don't remember you putting that anywhere in your profile <_< I'm telling you guys, you need to have something to back up a powerful ability. Hard work cannot do everything anyways. Hard work can't create objects out of thin air.
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