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Dec 8 2004, 04:57 AM (Post #1)
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Full Character Name: Momori Zaushi

Character Nicknames: LB, Lightning Flash, Speed Demon

Date of Birth: July 1st, 1987

Class /Job: Bodyguard/Assassin

Gender: Male

Relatives: (not revealed to protect them) Father - x Mother - x Sister - x Sister -x Brother - x

Height: 6'1"

Weight:
131 lbs

Appearance: Brown eyes, black hair, and has extremely well developed leg and arm muscles. He wears pants and a half hand shirt. He has an extremely large and heavy blade on his back (about 9 feet long, 2 feet wide, 7 inches thick, and about 120 lbs) which he can swing around with ease. His face has one scar by the side. His fists are bruised and scarred all over and his calf's and knees are full of cuts.

Background: Zaushi was born to a successful family of traders in a small village. As a young kid he used to travel with his parents when they went to sell goods at the big cities and villages. One day in a city he came across a combat school. The building intruded him so he sneaked into it and what he saw would effect him forever. There were many kids and adults there training and fighting, learning how to become a high rank warrior. From that moment he made up his mind to become the greatest warrior that ever lived. That was his dream and he would work at it forever. He knew, however, that he would never be accepted into combat school but didn't give up. He didn't have any exceptional physical skills and his control over magic was below average. But he worked his ass off everyday and began to increase in strength and speed.

Finally at the age of 11 he was recognized by others in his village and urged to go to the village to become a warrior. His parents gave him some money and told him to go if he wanted. Soon after he left for the city and joined the combat school there. However he was still one of the weakest people there since he still had poor control over magic. After seeing how good the other fighters were, he doubled his training and worker harder than anyone there. Everyday he would get up and just try and improve. Eventually at the age of 13 he was recommended as a skilled rookie and that he should be moved up to a low class warrior. However he was denied the promotion since his control over magic was too poor.

Zaushi was clearly stronger than any other rookie but he would not be allowed to become an official low class warrior till he could improve his magic skills. He worked hard and tried everyday but he could only improve them a bit. At the age of 14 he tried again to become a low class warrior but was failed again. He tried hard everyday and eventually at the age of 15 became a low class warrior. However he received a letter the next day after his promotion that if he didn't improve his control over magic in the next month he would be kicked out of combat school. He practiced everyday but couldn't do it in one month and was kicked out.

He then wandered around and 2 weeks later he met Grand (=/). Grand said he could make him the greatest warrior ever and he eagerly joined Grand. At the age of 16 his skills improved even more and he became the right hand of Grand and was ranked as an Elite warrior. He still pursues his dream to become the greatest warrior that ever lived and would do anything for that dream. Since he joined Grand, he has attacked many enemies but has never brought himself to killing one enemy. He is the ultimate warrior, he never loses in speed or strength. Even though his control over magic is still extremely weak, his physical skills are unbeatable. He easily dodges every physical and magic attack thrown at him with his speed and can appear right behind enemies in an instant. He wields a blade that is 120 lbs, 9 ft long, 2 ft wide, and 7 inches thick with ease. He has perfected many fighting styles and has never been beaten by anyone in a fight.

Personality: Zaushi is very naieve and his dream to be the best often makes him act the way he does. He trusts everyone even if everyone else around him doesn't. He is always positive and never thinks negative. He values life and how great it is instead of regretting the actions he makes. Because of this he can never bring him to kill someone but still injures some pretty badly (but not too much). He can also easily be tricked since he is so trusting. Basically he is like a little kid and doesn't really think too much about what will happen but does it just for his dream.

Equipment / Clothing
: He wears pants and a half hand shirt most of the time (unless its freezing). He carries a huge blade which hangs across his back and 2 short daggers on his left leg. His shoes are made so they are extremely light and can endure the speed he moves at without taking too much damage by pushing more force through the ground.

Other Info: Uhhh if you have a sad story or tell him that you want to be the best then he will help you out even if you are his enemy.

This post has been edited by Legendary Bladesman: Mar 29 2005, 06:14 AM
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Mar 24 2005, 03:52 AM (Post #46)
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shifty.gif Since when do we just arbitrarily make up rules when we feel like it? >.> Not including what I do
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Mar 24 2005, 05:29 AM (Post #47)
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Firstly I'd just like to say that I will only be editing the bio part. His blade will not be edited, if I get marked down for it then Wolf should have been marked down for his bio too since his guy was as old as time itself and thats more absurd than my guy =/

Secodly, I've been busy but I'm almost done with the bio so until its done no more posts in this this topic.

And lastly I don't really care whether I can post in those major storylines or not, I'm just gonna make my own anyways. No offense but your stories are too much like an anime rip off.
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Mar 24 2005, 05:54 AM (Post #48)
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But don't forget the formats.
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Mar 24 2005, 08:30 PM (Post #49)
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My guy is as old as time itself because he's critical to the storyline <_< In a nutshell, he is nothing short of a god. I am, of course talking about Sotha.
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Mar 29 2005, 05:24 AM (Post #50)
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Well my guy is greater than god. Although he cant live forever, he is way better than god ever was and ever will be. Oh just finished, gonna edit orignal post soon.
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Mar 29 2005, 05:33 AM (Post #51)
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o__o Just edit the profile XD
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Mar 29 2005, 05:48 AM (Post #52)
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done
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Mar 29 2005, 06:03 AM (Post #53)
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General Criterias:
Topic Title: Character Profile: Character Name (3 / 5 Points - Where the hell is the "Character Profile: " part? I'll give it back if you put it in.)
Topic Description: Whatever you feel fits (0 / 0 Points)
Length: (10 / 10+ points - Extras will count as "Extra Credit")
Grammar / Spelling: (5 / 6+ points - Exceptional work will receive "Extra Credit")
Neatness / Creativity: (6 / 6+ points - Same as above)

Profile Content:
Full Character Name (s): (4 / 4 Points)
Character Nickname (s): (3 / 3 Points)
Age / Date of Birth [If Known]: (2 / 4 Points - If you don't have it, say so)
Class / Job: (4 / 4 Points)
Gender: (2 / 2 Points)
Relatives: (4 / 4 Points)
Height / Weight: (2 / 2 Points)
Other Physical Attributes / Appearances: (9 / 10 Points - Fragments)
Mental Attributes / Personality: (9 / 10 Points - spelling, usage)
Background / History: (12 / 12 Points)
Equipment / Clothing: (10 / 10 Points)
Other Information: (6 / 8 Points - kinda incomplete...)

Oook...

Total: 91 / 100.

Not bad. I was grading pretty hard. Correct the mistakes and I'll give you a higher score.
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Mar 29 2005, 06:14 AM (Post #54)
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k made all grammar perfect
+ added BOD
+ uhh other stuff =/
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Mar 29 2005, 06:29 AM (Post #55)
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Are you sure? I meant it has to be Character Profile: Momori Zaushi as title.

And Naive is still wrong.

Now you're missing age...
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Mar 30 2005, 02:49 AM (Post #56)
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you know wat, your format is for idiots. It isn't anything big or anything. The spelling sure but the other s*it? K thats just stupid. If you know his birthdate then figure out his age. It also says his age in the background so try reading it. Also I already passed so w/e. Close this now.
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Mar 30 2005, 03:25 AM (Post #57)
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It needs multiple graders to ensure the consistency.

Also, the format thing is to check if you read the rules, and if you are capable of following them.
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